After the first round of voting and judging, the following wordsmiths have been evicted from the competition.

Osaretin

Ayotemide Akin-Onitolo

Alithnayn Abdulkareem

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Please click their names to read their Week 1 submissions. Also, read the judges feedback on their week 1 entries below.

Osaretin

 

Tendai: The epistolary is a difficult form at the best of times and this version is bland and uninspired. There is very little story in this. The language aims at lyrical but ends up archaic and prosaic. The one redeeming feature is the obvious affection between the two correspondents.

Ayotemide Akin-Onitolo

Titi: I couldn’t really find a flow with the story, too many missing pieces of information. The ending seems a little cliché and unbelievable. More could have been explained. Suspense is the only “it Factor“

Alithnayn Abdulkareem

Lauri: Lots of grammar and punctuation mistakes that should have been caught in editing. Ending slightly unconvincing- do doctors ever give days?

 

One thought on “Week 1 Eviction

  1. Oh dear, i did not even realize week 1 eviction had occurred when i voted. kept wondering why the voting pool was showing week 2. Oh well, off to read week 2 stories.

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